The dark shadow of a dangerous looking creature was circling around my canoe. I thought it looked too big for a normal fish. My heart started pounding faster and faster as it came closer.
A sharp fin popped out of the water following by a gigantic head. It was then that I noticed that it was a great white shark, its razor sharp teeth looked like broken glass. I lifted the paddle in case it jumped, if it did, then I will bash it on the head.
The shark bit part a piece out of my boat, It felt like my heart had jumped out.
I hopped into the water swimming away. I looked at the shark. From out of no where the shark was ripping a fish apart.
I enjoyed your writing Henry. I loved the simile about the teeth looking like glass. It sounded like an exciting adventure.
ReplyDeleteHello Henry very nice writing, but I think there were some mistakes. Like.
ReplyDeleteA sharp fin came out of the water following by a giant shark head. Shouldnt that be followed by a giant shark head. But I still enjoyed keep the work up. :)
Hi Henry
ReplyDeleteI like how you were writing about the shark. Your story was as scary as the shark. What I really like about your writing is how you started it by saying the dark shadow of a dangerous looking creature was circling around my canoe. Keep up the great work.
What shark do you think is stronger, the great white shark or the hammer head shark?
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